sábado, 12 de diciembre de 2009

CREATIVE ESSAY

OUTLINE

Paragraph 1: INTRODUCTION

Paragraph 2: Jude and his dream

Paragraph 3: The construction of the kite

Paragraph 4: In the top of the hill

Paragraph 5: CONCLUSION


JUDE’S DREAM


In a small village of London, named Forksluca lived a family formed by the parents and two children, a boy and a girl. Their names were Jude and Bibi. The children enjoyed a lot to play with the white and thick snow in the woods. But, Jude every winter felt afraid, because each inter was long and extremely cold. Jude all his life told his family that, he would invent something bright as the sun.

One night Jude had a strange dream. His dream was about several dead people, as a result of a long dark and freeze winter. At the following morning, Jude decided to build a kite. His purpose was to reach the sun, in order to place the sun on the main hill of Forksluca. Jude thought that in this way Forksluca would be warm during the winter. Jude told to Bibi his dream. Bibi shown enthusiasm about the construction of the kite, both decided to go to the attic of their house and look for materials for building the kite. After some hours Bibi had suggested to Jude a lot options, but Jude did not pay attention to Bibi, and Bibi told Jude: “Sorry Jude, but I will leave your project the attic is cold as ice, and you are stubborn as a mule. I told you easy options and you did not pay attention to me, “Oh no dear Bibi the construction of th most wonderful and amazing kite is something that I must think slowly as a tortoise”. After an intense search, Jude found a strong and big piece of wood, also a resistant but light piece of multicolor fabric.

In his room, Jude was very motivated and excited, and said to himself “You can do it, to build a kife is piece of cake”. The winter was cold, but not intense and Jude was orking very hard. Firstly Jude cut the multicolor fabric, he cut four big rhombuses. After that, he cut the wood and formed a big and thin cross almost thin as a toothpick. When he had everything ready, he took out of a drawer a resistant rope, which was a gift from his father, who was a woodcutter. Finally, after more than 12 hrs of work, Jude obtained a beautiful and practical kite, which looks big as big as an elephant and solid as a rock. Jude went to the woods, and started to proof his kite. The kite worked very well with the wind, because Jude ran very fast like a roadrunner. Jude was so happy and his following step was go to the top of the main hill of Forksluca and catch the sun.

At the next day, Jude woke up very early, he wore his jacket, jeans and tennis shoes also he took the rest of the rope, that he use for building the kite. When Jude arrived to the oods, he could notice that Forksluca as very cold and foggy. In this moment, he thought that was the exact moment, Forklsluca needed the warmth of the sun. Jude started to run so fast ith his kite. Suddenly the kite was flying like a beautiful butterfly in the sky. In few minutes Jude was on the top of the hill, from this place Jude could see the sun, which shone like gold. Jude took his rope, and tried to catch the sun several times. He was feeling discouraged, but in his last intent he caught the sun. With the sun fastened he pulled very hard for many hours. Finally, he got to place on the hill the shinny and splendid sun.

Jude was plenty; he had in his face a big smile. He started to run again, in order to return to Forksluca. When he arrived the citizens were clapping to Jude. His family was waiting for him. His parents and Bibi hugged Jude, and his mother told to him: “I always knew that I have a wonderful son. You are wise as an owl; you saved the village, through one of your inventions. And I do not have doubts about: Faith moved hills, you are the example, if someone preserves con reach his or her dreams.


TE AGRADEZCO SEÑOR (Roberto Carlos)


Voy a seguir una loza en lo alto
voy a oír una voz que me llama
voy a subir la montaña y estar aun mas
cerca de dios y rezar
voy a gritar y este mundo me oirá y me seguirá
todo este camino y ayudara a mostrar como es
este grito de amor y de fe
voy a pedir que las estrellas no paren de brillar
que los niños no dejen de sonreír
que los hombres jamás se olviden de agradecer

Por eso digo
te agradezco señor
por un día mas
te agradezco señor
que puedo ver
que seria de mi sin la fe que yo tengo en ti
Por mas que sufras
te agradezco señor también si lloro
te agradezco señor por entender
que todo eso me enseñe el camino
que lleva a ti
una vez mas
te agradezco señor
por otro día
te agradezco señor
que el sol nació
te agradezco señor nuevamente
agradezco señor
por eso digo te agradezco señor
por las estrellas
te agradezco señor
por las sonrisas
te agradezco señor nuevamente agradezco señor
una vez mas
te agradezco señor
por un nuevo día
te agradezco señor
por la esperanza
te agradezco señor nuevamente agradezco señor
por eso digo
te agradezco señor
por las sonrisas
te agradezco señor
por el perdón
te agradezco señor nuevamente agradezco señor
una vez mas
te agradezco señor por la esperanza
te agradezco señor
por todo eso .

Fuente: musica.com

2 comentarios:

  1. hi eli

    your essay is good you improved a lot your way of writing.
    your story about the song is really well develop. You use the appropiate similes. Sincerly congratulations you improved your writning.

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  2. Heyy Elyy monita!!

    Sorry for posting on your essay soo late !!

    I liked your essay so much, it is what it must be: a creative essay !!

    You wrote an interesting story inspired in a beatiful song !!

    and as Andre said, you have improved a lot in your writing skills!!

    Congrats !!

    Bye

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